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Old 09-11-2007, 08:00 AM   #11 (permalink)
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Hidden System

Common are we
With knowledge of NOTHING
As our forefathers audaciously designed

Extant this government remains
In complicity they reign
Epediently disposing history

As our Civilization unrolls
New "stories" will be told
As was the BOOKS OF YESTERDAY

Through lenses of conception
The simple will forever perceive
In God we will always believe

With the future to come,
Approaches renewed law
Annexing the seven regions

While the Illuminati play
And the Hidden System maintained
Ignorant we shall stay




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Old 09-11-2007, 08:01 AM   #12 (permalink)
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Useless

Unfathomable I am
Always failing to clarify my intentions
My eccentric and bewildered mind
Forever stubborn in understanding the
Concerns of others

My fold and I the same
Bemused, no one ethos alike
Bound together by poison
Our intelligence fades,
Altoghter with our lives
Futile to mankind
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Old 09-11-2007, 10:34 AM   #13 (permalink)
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Old 09-11-2007, 11:08 AM   #14 (permalink)
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yep... did the first almost a year ago and the other one in 9th grade
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Old 09-11-2007, 02:07 PM   #15 (permalink)
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The first one seems to on a topic I dont follow but I do like the writing. Do you follow a certain style when putting your stuff together cause it seems like a hikou type deal or however thats spelled.
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Old 09-11-2007, 05:34 PM   #16 (permalink)
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As much as i like you, that poem was garbage, not because of the rhymes or anything, its because of the content.
Lol. Nothing a grade 8 genious like yourself could conjure up, eh?
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Lol. Nothing a grade 8 genious like yourself could conjure up, eh?
BJJ boy is afraid of the darkside. His ears would bleed if he listened to metallica or for that matter SLAYER!!!
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Old 09-11-2007, 09:14 PM   #18 (permalink)
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As much as i like you, that poem was garbage, not because of the rhymes or anything, its because of the content.

Wow, how rude, ya coulda just left that to yourself. If poetry aint your thing then ya just keep it to yourself.

As for the opening poem I thought it was good, if ya got a good beat too it ya could make a sweet hip-hop track!
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Old 09-11-2007, 09:28 PM   #19 (permalink)
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Here's One

I Wish I Was A Child

I wish I was a child,
so I could believe

that you wouldn’t lie to me,
that you wouldn’t deceive.


I wish I was a kid again.
If I was then I would know

that I’d want to be grown up.
I’d just want to grow.


When we’re childlike, we see the world through a set different eyes.

Eyes that are virgin pure. Pupils of disguise.

Years and time attack the eyes in the form of lies and rage
As the child becomes older and the child starts to age.

My eyes have become calloused,
hardened with life’s debris.
I hear them say they’ll be there.
I watch but I don’t see.

Blinded by perfect vision.
Sight impaired and damned.
A child’s eyes will start to tear.
When the child becomes…
A man.
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Old 09-11-2007, 11:22 PM   #20 (permalink)
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